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Friday, May 3, 2019

My Holiday

WALT: We are learning to write edit and  recraft our writing.

To write my story I made a plan at the top of the page. Then I wrote my story underneath. The green writing shows the editing I have done and the red parts show what Mr Masters helped me with.   


Writing


In the holidays I went fishing at the worf. M y cousins Blake,
                                                                    Wharf    M
Wade and Julien^ catch too Kingy's, one Snapper and one
                            They   caught
spikfish’.  The Kingy’s were 8 kilos^that was bigger than the
  SpikeyFish                                           but
Snapper. The fish  smells so fishy^ I did not like that smell it
                                   Smelt                   and
Isgross. the squid was so squishy too.  I went with my
Was        T
cousins, Dad, Mum, Zion and Tyson. It was such a fun week


because I get to swim in the deep and have bikies. When I got
                   Got                                                               bikies
out^ I was all wet and slippery with sop.      
                                                          Soap
Wharf       Spikeyfish        smelt bikies was      got soap


too

Reflection: It was complicated because I did not no what the carrots meant.

Question: What did you do in the holidays.

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