My Holiday

WALT: We are learning to write edit and  recraft our writing.

To write my story I made a plan at the top of the page. Then I wrote my story underneath. The green writing shows the editing I have done and the red parts show what Mr Masters helped me with.   

Writing

In the holidays I went fishing at the worf. M y cousins Blake,

                                                                    Wharf    M

Wade and Julien^ catch too Kingy's, one Snapper and one

                            They   caught

‘spikfish’.  The Kingy’s were 8 kilos^that was bigger than the

  SpikeyFish                                           but

Snapper. The fish  smells so fishy^ I did not like that smell it

                                   Smelt                   and

Isgross. the squid was so squishy too.  I went with my

Was        T

cousins, Dad, Mum, Zion and Tyson. It was such a fun week

because I get to swim in the deep and have bikies. When I got

                   Got                                                               bikies

out^ I was all wet and slippery with sop.      

                                                          Soap

Wharf       Spikeyfish        smelt bikies was      got soap

too

Reflection: It was complicated because I did not no what the carrots meant.

Question: What did you do in the holidays.