To write my story I made a plan at the top of the page. Then I wrote my story underneath. The green writing shows the editing I have done and the red parts show what Mr Masters helped me with.
Writing
In the holidays I went fishing at the worf. M y cousins Blake,
Wharf M
Wade and Julien^ catch too Kingy's, one Snapper and one
They caught
‘spikfish’. The Kingy’s were 8 kilos^that was bigger than the
SpikeyFish but
Snapper. The fish smells so fishy^ I did not like that smell it
Smelt and
Isgross. the squid was so squishy too. I went with my
Was T
cousins, Dad, Mum, Zion and Tyson. It was such a fun week
because I get to swim in the deep and have bikies. When I got
Got bikies
out^ I was all wet and slippery with sop.
Soap
Wharf Spikeyfish smelt bikies was got soap
too
Reflection: It was complicated because I did not no what the carrots meant.
Question: What did you do in the holidays.
